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I was wondering why I wasn't happy with the first coloured piece.
It was because I wanted that she may look sick or sleepy like in the scketch version. Also she is more than 30years old. In the first version she looks too young. ^^;
So I added some grey up and under each eyes.

What do you think?

Better? No?

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Sayu see that women wandering in this broken school.

The women with the lantern:

-"please if you need to rest, I will stay protecting you from the darkness"

-"If you need some help, please ask me some questions"

-"But remeber, I may left soon"

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SAVE YOUR PARTY
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ASK SOME HELP
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REST
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Noroi project is right reserved 2009 (c) S.Mayku U.W.M :iconmayku: and D. :icondalwundherel:

Ps:The second text are only hints, not the final text who ma appeare

Critiques


:icontasldaed:
Your shading has a nice solidity to it, however your lineart is too sketchy and contradicts that smoothness. the eyes are nice and have the 'appearance' of tiredness to them, yet the pupil of the eye has no depth to it ( maybe add detail to the colour part with some shading, I would suggest crosshatch, yet that might clash with your style). I think you have a nice distinctive style.
warning, even if you are doing a sketch try to have a background that enhances your character, nothing tells you how well your character holds up in a physical sense then actually throughing them against an enviroment and seeing if they can hold their own.
Overall I really like this, I liked it so much that I bought a deviantart subscription and even reloaded my browser five times to get to this. :)
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:icontasldaed:
nice picture :heart:

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"Writing is entering a doorway only to discover many more things." -Pistachio
:iconlweeling:
Je trouve en effet que le gris lui donne un air plus fatigué ou malade, et on dirait bien qu'elle a dans la trentaine selon moi!
Elle fait pas trop vingtaine en tout cas, ça c'est sûr! Surement dû à la maturité de son visage.

En résumé, ça correspond mieux au perso je pense! ^^

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And then there was Silence....
:iconmayku:
merci pour ton avis ^^ je crois que je vais montré celui la au profs.^^

Bon ils vont me tuer parce que c'est un peu style manga mdr, mais peu pas tout faire en réaliste ou j'y passe toute ma vie dessu XD
:iconlweeling:
Oui, c'est vrai que réaliste c'est quand même vachement plus long à faire XD
Au pire tu leur montre celui là en leur disant que si ça leur plait, tu la refais en réaliste? lol

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And then there was Silence....
:iconlweeling:
:XD:

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And then there was Silence....
:icontagath:
c'est vrai qu'elle fait plus fatiguée comme ça, et dans l'ensemble j'aime vraiment mieux cette version^^ (perso j'aurai peut-être un peu plus étendu les cernes cela dit, là ça peut passer pour du maquillage je trouve...)

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Save a cockroach, eat insecticide.

The Witch: a webcomic
:iconmayku:
^^ je voulais pas faire trop non plus car sinon on pourrais la prendre pour une morte ^^

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